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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is believed by some that foreigners who move to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour, while other think, cultural differences should be welcomed by the
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 region. In my opinion, visitors should
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 the traditions of a
country
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 by following them, while a
host
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 state should accept and appreciate different
cultures
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. On the one hand, many think following local customs and behaviour is necessary by any visitor into the
country
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 so that they are respected. They believe that the locals should not be affected by the foreigners' different behaviours and
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 still maintaining
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 and dignity in their society.
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, some people disagree and say that
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 or traditions from any part of the world should be accepted and appreciated by the
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country
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 is because times have changed and no one should be judged according to what they wear and bring into a certain
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.
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, in my opinion,
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, appreciation and acceptance all play essential roles. Visitors should not intentionally disrespect one's culture and influence the locals to any sort of
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, while the nationals in the
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country
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 need to accept and appreciate the internationals'
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 and restrain from judging them for what and who they are. In conclusion, tourists should bring
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 into a
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 to maintain
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cultures
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, whereas appreciation and acceptance by another state need to be put into consideration for the visitors to be welcomed warmly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural understanding
  • cultural harmony
  • local customs and behaviours
  • host country's traditions
  • unintentional offense
  • enhance the travel experience
  • cultural fabric
  • inclusive society
  • diverse society
  • global understanding
  • mutual respect
  • respect for local customs
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