As global trade increases between different countries, many daily necessities are produced in other countries. Such goods are usually transported a long distance. Do the benefits of this trend outweigh its drawbacks?

Due to the increasing
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globalised
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markets, a large number of our daily life
items
are imported from remote countries. There are some
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benefits
associated with
this
trading modality, but it seems that
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perspective it can affect local economies. An important number of people's everyday goods are imported in large quantities from countries like China or India, where human resources are considerably cheap and
items
are produced massively, these products are widely distributed at very affordable prices which made them
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expense that consumers do not think would affect their budgets.
for instance
, the
items
people use to buy at the Dollaramas,
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prices
are very advantageous, qualitywise, perhaps not as much, if tool bought at these type of shops is not expected to be as good as one purchased at a specialized store. But, moving the attention away from the price and the convenience of
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simple little things anywhere without considering it a significant expense, the trade of
such
products can harm the local economy by affecting the local industry,
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domestic
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had to close their doors due to the globalised market, their operational cost is high and they simply cannot compete with the
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giants
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overseas,
this
in a
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longer
larger
-term perspective can be detrimental to the local economy as unemployment rates would be inevitably higher due to the business going into
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bankruptcy
. A recent study revealed that 30% of the domestic business in Canada filed
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bankruptcy
due to globalization. To conclude,
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buy cheaper
items
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to be
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win situation, it cannot be regarded as positive
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straightforwardly
due to its certain drawbacks particularly in what refers to the domestic industries.
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