People are consuming more and more sugar-based drinks. Why? What can be done to reduce sugary drink consumption?

It is observed that nowadays many individuals prefer to intake sugary
drinks
.
This
essay will discuss the causes behind it as well as some steps which can be taken to minimize the consumption of
this
type of
drinks
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. On the one hand, there are a number of reasons behind
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rise in consuming
sugar based
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beverages. Mainly, the companies are following heavy marketing policy for promoting their product with misleading information which is mainly targeting youth and
child
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. Not only
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generation but
also
all age
group
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groups
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are attracted to the advertisement and become addicted to the soft
drink
.
Moreover
,
this
kind of
drink
instantly boosts energy level as it has
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level of sucrose.
For instance
, many people who have
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job
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prefer to
drink
it because they think while drinking soft
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work increases. For aforesaid problems, numerous approaches can be taken to reduce the intake of sweetened
drinks
.
Firstly
,
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should take steps to control the situation
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introducing
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tax on these items which might be an effective solution.
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,
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authority
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implemented
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tax on tobacco products.
Secondly
, health awareness programs on TV and social media could help in combating the advertisement for soft
drinks
by marketing agencies.
Furthermore
, vending machines must be removed from public places like schools, bus stations, hospitals, cinemas for discouraging the consumption of sugary
drinks
. In conclusion,
although
several reasons are there to
drink
more soft
drinks
, there are various measures that could be taken to discourage people from it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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