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Many employers are employimg people with good social skills as well as good qualifications. Do you agree or disagree that good social skills is as important as good qualifications to succeed in job

#employers #employimg #people #skills #qualifications #job
It is true that most
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organizations
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the organizations
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 seeking members to join
to
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their staff , who has both excellent academic and technical
skills
 and impressive
communication
 strategies.
However
 ,the success of a company ,highly
depemds
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depends
 on the quality of its staff.
On the other hand
,the world is now more and more
advance
 in technology and
higly
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highly
 competitive when
compairing
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comparing
 with
past
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.
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 of
that people
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that person
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 with
advance
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qualificationss
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qualifications
 and interactive
communication
skills
highly
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are highly
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 demanded group in the
job
 market.
Thus
, I believe that
,
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to succeed
a
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in a
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given
job
 task without any failure they must have both excellent
qualifications
 and impressive
cocommunication
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communication
skills
.
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Further more
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,
this
 is a digital era where
most
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 powerful and
advance
 technological devices
existwho
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exist who
 ever in
this
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 20th century,must
capable
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 to manipulate
such
equopment
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equipment
 without any
doubts
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.
In addition
 to that ,must be updated their knowledge about the stream. More than that, to develop
equipments
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 in
advance
 than before,
expert
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an expert
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 in
qualifications
 and experiences are useful. Though good
qualifications
effec
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effect
 to the
job
succeed
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,
communication
skills
olso
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also
 take a prominent place to maintain a
job
 environment where the
perdon
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person
 works. When
consider
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about
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a seller who is going to introduce new equipment to a customer , interactive
communication
 strategies play
vital
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a vital
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 role to get
customer's
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the customer's
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 perception
to
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 the equipment.
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skills
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 important not only in front of the person
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physically but
also
 via
onlin
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online
 or phone call as well.
In
contrast
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 I think that verbal and
non verbal
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communication
 is
also
 a fact to get interaction
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form
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 the customer. In conclusion,I can say that
,
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job
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the job
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 market is searching
persons
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for persons
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 who can deal with
extream
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extreme
 conditions. So, the proficiency of higher
qualifications
 and impressive
communication
 of
a
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 employee who can handle current situations in the
job
,
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is the most successful and demanded person that they are seeking.
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