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Task1. The pie chat show the electricity consumption in different sectors of eastern Europe in 2007 and 2010

The information about the proportion of
electricity
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 consumed in eight different zones in eastern Europe between 2007 and 2010 is elucidated in the pie chart. Overall, it can be inferred that maximum
electricity
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 was used in the residential sector in both the
years
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.
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, none of the sectors except other metals and manufacturing Sai considerable change in the electric power utilization over the three
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. As it is clear, there was no change in the proportion of
electricity
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 utilization in residential, commercial, transport and agriculture sectors between 2007 and 2010. In both these
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 , Residential and commercial sectors together accounted for slightly more than half of total service usage, with individual figures at 28% and 23% respectively.
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, a mere 1.8% of
electricity
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 was consumed in the agricultural and transport region combined. Probing
further
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,
electricity
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 consumption in other metals and mining saw an increase. In other metals, the proportion rose by 6
%
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over the three
years
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 to reach 18.3 % in 2010, while in mining it was 9% in 2007 and it stood at 9.4
%
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in 2010.
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,
electricity
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 consumption in manufacturing and aluminium stood at around 12.5% and 13.5
%
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respectively in 2007 and over the three
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,there was a fall of 4
%
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and 2% respectively.

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