Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, especially when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sums of money that are out of proportion to the importance of the work that they do. How far do you agree? What criteria should be used to decide how much people are paid?

Nowadays it is argued that some
workers
like doctors and policemen are less valued than expected and for
this
reason, they received a poor
salary
for what they do,
on the contrary
, others earn huge sums of money for doing work with relative importance. In
this
essay, I will discuss
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criteria
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needed for judging the
salary
of
people
and
then
I will explain why I strongly disagree with the statement.
Firstly
, I believe that one of the main aspects for deciding how much
people
are paid is the future income that the
workers
will assure,
for example
, a famous actor will earn a large quantity of money due to the fact that
people
and fans will pay for watching that film and all the organisation will earn.
Moreover
, company bosses could improve the business of the company and maybe they will increase the profit.
Although
the
salary
depends
by
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the role of
workers
,
people
said that some kinds of job must be more reward in light of the fact that they work for
the
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society and there are
a
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social and moral aspects behind
this
role, in fact, doctors are paid several timeless than famous actor even if
doctor
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the doctor
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could save human life. In conclusion, I think that the main aspect for judging the
salary
of
workers
is
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the future revenue that
people
will assure to the company which paid their earning because there will be a profit,
by contrast
,
workers
who cover a social aspect in society, should be paid more than their present
salary
because from that kind of person
depend
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our health, security and education.
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