Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are some institutes in the world who think that their workers should be well-dressed on the
job
, while other organizations preferred work quality as compared to appearance. In
this
essay, I will discuss both views and explain why I agree with the latter view.
Firstly
, I will elaborate about why look smartly is necessary
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some people's opinion and
secondly
, I will express my thoughts on why the quality of wor matter the most. On the one hand, it is
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necessary to look sharp as
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demand it.
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, if
institut
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hired a
sales-manager
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, he must have
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wear formal dressing as well as ride in an expensive car so he can interact with big clients. As a consequence of
this
, the investment in
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increased which ultimately
also
financially benefit the manager.
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dress code is
also
distinguished staff from the general public.
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, if some patient
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a hospital, he can easily spot the doctor if he wears the
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.
On the other hand
, I believe that performing a
job
and
also
managing the appearance at the same time can b stressful
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. In
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to look smart, out sufficient amount of budget
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on buying
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shoes and new clothes.
For instance
, if our
job
is in an IT company
then
we
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have to sit on our desk and develop
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software. In conclusion, those companies which
believe
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that dress smartly is essential think that
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give their employees identity and
also
increase
institut
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reputation. In my opinion, having no worries
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how to look smart and sharp
increae
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increase
productivity and focus to work.
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