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Schools should give up using books, which makes children feel boring, they should use films, video games, computers instead.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

More and more schools are willing to use digital materials, including films,
computers
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 and even
video
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games
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, in the classrooms.Students are attracted to them because digital materials and facilities are more interesting than
books
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.I disagree that film,
computers
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 and
video
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games
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 should replace
books
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 in
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school.I am analysing the drawbacks of digital facilities to both harms for
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's health and lack of accuracy.
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，watching digital material for a long time is bad for
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's eyes.
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, extended screen time hurt
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 's eyes. More and more students wear glasses because they spend
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 spare time on
video
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games
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 and
computers
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. If the book is totally replaced by films,
video
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games
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, and
computers
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,
this
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 trend will worsen.
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, digital material is less accurate than
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.
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, movies, even documentaries, are different from actual history. The writers and directors always create some unrealistic things in the film. If films become the only resource for
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 to learn history, it will be tough to understand the truth. In conclusion,
books
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 benefit students in terms of health and accuracy.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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