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Many young people regularly change their job over the years. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #change #job #years
Regular consumption of several nutrients of the average American people
have
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 been illustrated by the given pie diagrams in the form of
percentage
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. Excessive eating of any one of them can cause serious health issues. Overall,
three
 charts have been displayed to demonstrate fractions of
three
 essential substances in four distinct time periods of having
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a meal
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meal
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 on a day-to-day basis. It has been shown that lunch and dinner hours comprises
of
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a larger share of vital elements as
compare
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 to the rest two meals. Sodium consumption during dinner is larger than
remaining
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the remaining
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three
 eating periods. It makes up a massive segment of 43% accurately. Meanwhile, saturated fat and added sugar
accounts
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 for 37% and 23% respectively by Americans. For
breakfast
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 all
three
 components are in harmony and depicting a value, which is less than one-fifth of the total. Whereas, in
snacks
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 the percentage of
this
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these
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 elements are varying substantially. All of these
three
 crucial substances are acquiring a significant share of below one-
third
 by the American citizens on an average in each intake.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • personal fulfillment
  • values
  • fulfilling
  • benefits
  • motivator
  • career advancement
  • skill development
  • climbing the career ladder
  • dynamic work environment
  • adaptability
  • opportunities
  • work-life balance
  • flexibility
  • professional and personal lives
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