Do you think businesses should hire employees who will spend their entire lives working for the company? Explain why do you agree or disagree. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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Nowadays, with the
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world, the majority of the businesses tends to choose employees who will give their entire life for the sake of
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company
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. I partially agree with
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statement, because it will give both pros and cons for the
company
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as well as
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the worker
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worker
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. In
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will discuss both views with
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To begin
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with, the
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and most important thing is that the
workers
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who work for
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period of time do not leak any confidential information of the corporation.
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, they know everything
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the business
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as capital, profits, losses, different policies which cannot be leaked by the
workers
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.
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,
firm
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firms
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do not spend
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amount
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of money for
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recruiting
purposes. Firms do not need to spend money on different activities like selection process, training and development etc.
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, research shows that the Dale
company
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of manufacturing computers save
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millions
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for
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the policy of long term
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between
workers
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.
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, it gives many benefits to the corporation to a large extent.
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, despite the upside of
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trajectory, the drawback cannot be undermined.
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, it hinders the ample opportunities of
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hand
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. If, persons
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for
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old
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time, they
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for only one skill and don't have any skill or experience in
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. In
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additionally
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, if the firm goes to losses and
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to give any salary, it will huge loss to the apprentice.
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, as long as offices retain old staff and do not
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recruit
new one, it will negatively impact on both firm and
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.
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, no new skills and methods will be adopted by old employees. To conclude, from the above discussions, it can be deduced that selecting jobholder for higher periods reduce the selection cost of
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company
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and maintain secrets, it can
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lead to low profitability and
less
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job events of
worker
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the worker
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