Nowadays children watch a lot of TV and play video games. However, some people think that activities are not good for a child’s mental health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Children
spend too much time watching television and playing
games
on the
internet
. Some people believe that these kinds of activities have an adverse impact on their brains. I completely agree with
this
statement because TV or computer can leads to a sedentary lifestyle and depression
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children
. Overconsumption of gadgets like smartphones, laptops or computers can make
children
lazy and unhealthy because staring several hours on the screen means no other body movement, which means they do not play outdoor
games
that are indispensable for
the
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mental development.
As a result
, it can give rise to various health-related problems.
For instance
, According to the survey done by a newspaper ‘ Times
India’
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children
who spend maximum time on
internet
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the internet
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have less
intellual
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intellectual
skills compares to those who play outdoor
games
,
hence
it can cause impaired brain development. Sitting in front of computers for a long time can cause depression, loneliness and mental sickness as in some video
games
, the contents are sensitive enough to make suicidal thoughts in
children
's minds.
This
is because when
children
see their favourite characters are fighting in the game, they try to intimate them.
For example
, many
children
jumper from the roof after playing
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of
War Craft
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game on the
internet
.
Therefore
, I believe that overconsumption of video
games
is dangerous for their health, so
it
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should be used in moderation. In conclusion, overconsumption of the
internet
is not a good idea because it has a negative effect on
children
's mental health
also
prevents them from getting enough exercise and they should
therefore
only be used sparingly.

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