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In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

#countries #places #people #ban
I agree. Smoking causes a lot of health-related
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 and imposing a ban on the same is appreciatable. Though the authority earnings on
tobacco-related
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a tobacco-related
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commodity
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 is relatively high compared to
other commodity
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 the repercussions in terms of health-related
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 and state spending on the same is a cause of concern. Smoking becomes an irrevocable habit of adults in the contemporary world despite the personal health-related dangerous outcomes.
This
 habit practised across the globe and the tobacco industry has seen a significant surge over the decades. People tend to use
this
 habit to get rid off of personal stress-related
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, socialization and addiction etc.
However
, awareness
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 the negative impacts of tobacco usage is being discussed and published in various means to save people from life
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threatening
 health-related
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. As an outcome, so many
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 have imposed
ban
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 on smoking in public places assuming the daily intake of the smoker to be reduced
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certain
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 extent and to save the general public who are not smokers but get effects from the smokers.
Also
,
such
 an arrangement avoids teenagers and
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children
childrens
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 who tend to become smokers
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 a greater extent.
On the other hand
,
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 industry is a revenue booster of the power where
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have
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 been taxed at high rates. The decline in
consumption
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 of tobacco-related merchandise would directly impact the revenue of the regime. Studies show that the health-related concern of using
cigarette
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 is surging and become complicated. The majority of
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 provides healthcare services free of charge and expenditure on the same is surging in line with the well-being controversy from cigarette usage. To overcome
such
 issues many countries exploring other revenue streams to compensate for the reduction in earnings from tobacco usage since the well being of human capital is
considerded
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considered
 to be valuable. Smoking in public places is banned
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 so many people and justification to do so is agreeable.
This
 could save many of our lives and reduce social problems.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • prevalence
  • respiratory issues
  • environmental pollution
  • litter
  • healthcare costs
  • smoking-induced illnesses
  • encourage smokers to quit
  • public health improvement
  • justified
  • public spaces
  • exposure
  • non-smokers
  • inconvenience
  • younger populations
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