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Paying all employees the same salary in a company promotes harmony and respect amongst colleagues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Equal pay to all workers in an organization would earn respect and harmony among the employees. I agree as only harmony and respect considered as factors to decide on same. People do work to earn money and to live a respectful life in society. Money becomes the most important factor in deciding every aspect of life in the contemporary arena. Finding a decent job to survive in
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 available if you have the right skills and dedication. Corporate culture constantly links the perks to individual outcomes ultimately benefits the bottom-line of the company. There are entities with high social values that repeatedly improvises the need for an equal-pay system to maintain order and dignity amongst the staff members.
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 ideology helps the entity to reach greater heights as the dedication of human capital will be higher than the performance-based pay mechanism.
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, an employee would feel empowerment and ownership if they were treated equally on a pay scale.
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, social status changes according to the pay scale of an individual. To conclude, Salary plays an important role in determining the outcome of an employee. A performance-based pay scale can generate expected results of an entity to meet their short term goals.
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, equal pay can be a great option to maintain order and dignity amongst all levels of employees.
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