My older sister is a good teacher We drink milk every day

My older
sister
is a good
teacher
We drink milk every day I am good at swimming, but I don'
t
like it It was raining, so I didn'
t
go to school When my
sister
got married, my parents were happy When I have a lot of money, I will buy a new bike I have to get up early today because I have an important class meeting, but I feel tired After the finished the lesson, the
teacher
give us homework, so we had to finish it My older
sister
is a good
teacher
We drink milk every day I am good
swimming
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at swimming

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,but
i
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I

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don'
t
like it It was raining, so I didn'
t
go to school When my
sister
get married, my parents
was
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were

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happy When I have a lot of money, I will buy
new
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a new

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bike I have to get up early today because
i
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I

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have an important class meeting, but
I'm feel
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I'm feeling

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tired After
finished
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the finished

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lesson
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the lesson

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,
teacher
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the teacher

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give us
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homework

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home work
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homework

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, so we had to finish it
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