Some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
There is no doubt that owing to
contemporary
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the contemporary
era
now life is more stressful and busier . Use synonyms
Hence
, it is opined by some masses that it having some negative effect on Linking Words
families
. Use synonyms
Although
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,
there are some positive outcomes of modern lifestyle, undesirable effects on Remove the comma
apply
families
are far more .
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modernised
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the modernised
a modernised
era
, the prominent one is that nowadays people have more demands and wishes other than needs, which require more money. Use synonyms
Consequently
, parents spend more Linking Words
time
on Use synonyms
job
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the job
for
doing extra work to earn more money to fulfil Change preposition
apply
family's
desires. Thereby, they do not get enough quality Correct article usage
the family's
time
to Use synonyms
spent
with family members Change the form of the verb
spend
this
is not only deteriorating love and affection among Linking Words
parent
and children but Fix the agreement mistake
parents
also
generating generation gap.
Another worth considering point is that owing to competitive Linking Words
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cut-throat
cut throat
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cutthroat
era
, sense of competition among youngsters in order to be successful in life is increased . Whether in education or to get placement in Use synonyms
dream
organisation, they spend late hours Correct article usage
a dream
to complete
their assignment and projects. Change the verb form
completing
As a result
, students do not spend enough Linking Words
time
with their guardians, Use synonyms
therefore
, a sense of selfishness is ameliorated among Linking Words
families
, everyone is busy Use synonyms
to accomplish
their goals.
Despite having numerous drawbacks modern world Change the verb form
accomplishing
also
have some positive outcomes on Linking Words
families
, now folks have Use synonyms
cell
phone to communicate with anyone regardless of staying thousands of kilometres away from each other. Apart from Add an article
a cell
this
, public transportation like private taxis, own cars or bike and Linking Words
airplane
these are methods available now due to modern technology. Change the spelling
aeroplane
Thus
, family members can use them now to commute whether from house to work or educational institution and they can have dinner together at night and spent quality Linking Words
time
with each other .
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this
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era
is created Use synonyms
huge
impact on family members. Now neither parents have enough Add an article
a huge
time
to Use synonyms
sepnd
with their children sinceCorrect your spelling
spend
,
they are busy to accomplish occupational goals nor Remove the comma
apply
children
have much Add a missing verb
do children
time
as they are swamped in studies to compete Use synonyms
the
competition.Change preposition
in the
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