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Some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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There is no doubt that owing to
contemporary
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era
 now life is more stressful and busier .
Hence
, it is opined by some masses that it having some negative effect on
families
.
Although
,
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 there are some positive outcomes of modern lifestyle, undesirable effects on
families
 are far more . Commencing with the drawbacks of
modernised
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era
 , the prominent one is that nowadays people have more demands and wishes other than needs, which require more money.
Consequently
, parents spend more
time
 on
job
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for
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doing extra work to earn more money to fulfil
family's
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 desires. Thereby, they do not get enough quality
time
 to
spent
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 with family members
this
 is not only deteriorating love and affection among
parent
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parents
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 and children but
also
 generating generation gap. Another worth considering point is that owing to competitive
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cut throat
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cutthroat
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era
 , sense of competition among youngsters in order to be successful in life is increased . Whether in education or to get placement in
dream
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a dream
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 organisation, they spend late hours
to complete
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 their assignment and projects.
As a result
, students do not spend enough
time
 with their guardians,
therefore
, a sense of selfishness is ameliorated among
families
, everyone is busy
to accomplish
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 their goals. Despite having numerous drawbacks modern world
also
 have some positive outcomes on
families
, now folks have
cell
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 phone to communicate with anyone regardless of staying thousands of kilometres away from each other. Apart from
this
, public transportation like private taxis, own cars or bike and
airplane
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 these are methods available now due to modern technology.
Thus
, family members can use them now to commute whether from house to work or educational institution and they can have dinner together at night and spent quality
time
 with each other . To recapitulate,
this
 contemporary
era
 is created
huge
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 impact on family members. Now neither parents have enough
time
 to
sepnd
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spend
 with their children since
,
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 they are busy to accomplish occupational goals nor
children
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do children
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 have much
time
 as they are swamped in studies to compete
the
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in the
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 competition.
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