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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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The possession of luxuries items among citizens,
such
 as
car
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, has
showed
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 rapid growth during the past decades. The major reason is that several individuals prefer to live luxury lifestyles and seek
for
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ultimate conveniences.
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, cities all over the globe have encountered the problem of road congestion. In general,
this
 is an urgent issue that government must take control
immediately
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. According to
current
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 situation, the number of cars has gradually risen every year. becoming a group of traffic
jam
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,
this
 concern is extremely intense
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 in metropolitan cities. In
city
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 like Bangkok, almost
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 after 5 p.m. when most workers have finished their jobs, the traffic starts to
accumulated
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.
This
 situation
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 worst when there are
accident
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 and weather
condition
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,
such
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raining
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.
In addition
, the large number of cars lead to long-term environmental issues,
such
 as carbon emissions and scarcity of natural resources. 
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 taxes and improvement of public transportation are essential measures that government need to take action. The authorities set
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 on
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 of
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the car
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car
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 that each person can own.
Then
, if
excessive
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 vehicle is needed, extra taxes can be charged.
Additionally
, the rise in
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 of oil has
possible
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 chance of reducing
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uses
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 of
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the car
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car
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 as well.
Consequently
, the extravagant cost in
car
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able
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 to discourage
majority
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 of the citizens. Another solution is to encourage people to use public transportation. These methods can mitigate the
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on going
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 problem of traffic
jam
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 in various countries because there are fewer cars on the roads.
Moreover
,
car pool
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 is
also
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, which gathered strangers with the same destinations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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