Schools are spending more time teaching subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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history which might be useful to get them a

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. Few believe the pupil should be taught much of the time on teaching

skills

,that will benefit them to hold a

job

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competitive world.

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both

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views and I will explain my opinion in detail. On the one hand,

students

should have a choice to choose the subjects

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interest ,

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whereas

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schools are pushing on teaching longer duration only 1 or 2 subject in detail that has a significant history in the past but the

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likelihood

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job

results in lesser percentage.

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students

who study history are having minimal

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opportunities

to become

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full time

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archealogists

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compared to others having different

skills

. On the flip side, if the schools take a big step and teach all the

students

about teaching

skills

which can gain confidence while talking and able to deliver a speech in public which is so much essential in the present world.

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this

skill in

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,along with

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particular subject knowledge might be more successful in holding a

job

quickly either in

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field or else he/she can train others due to

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teaching skill.For these reasons, To conclude,I agree that school management should focus more on teaching

skills

rather on 1 subject which has

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benefits.

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Schools are spending more time teaching subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

For many people, profession is the lifelong commitment. They start their carrier in one profession and stick to it through their life. For some others, there is no need to stick to one carrier or one profession. They even pursue multiple carriers at once. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Public celebrations (festivals, national day) are held in some countries. Some people think that they are very expensive and the government should spend money on some other important issues. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think it is a better way to leave their home country to improve their work and living opportunities, while others think staying in their own country is a better choice. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Differences between countries are barely evident these days. Everyone in the world is wearing the same brand and watching the same TV channels and movies. Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?