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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job statisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

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Since human beings have spent one-
third
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 of their days at
work
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,
job
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satisfaction
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 is fundamental for them. It is a key factor for happiness, wellbeing, inner peace, physical and mental health, self-improvement, and so on.
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, many variants
such
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 as both physical and social environment, interest, and salary have an impact on the contentment of
work
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.
However
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, some
people
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 may have unrealistic requests and expectations in
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 regard.
Firstly
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,
people
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 must have appropriate physical conditions to be pleased. It is important that the workplace whether is cold or warm, bright or dark and has ergonomic furniture. If employees are obligated to sit on an uncomfortable chair or
work
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 in a windowless room, they can not perform their duties properly. Not only the physical but
also
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 the social environment, which includes having fun with colleagues or friends, whether the atmosphere of business is competitive or friendly, the relationship between worker and employer, is significant for gratification.
For instance
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, a
laborer
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labourer
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 who is mobbed or harassed by his manager and colleagues will not
fulfill
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 his assignment because of being stressed and under pressure.
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 he loves and is proud of his occupation, he will start to be reluctant to go to the office. In terms of workload, bosses should neither overburden anyone nor divide it unfairly among all workers.
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,
satisfaction
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 is related to interest. Areas of interest and hobbies might give
people
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 the opportunity to turn hobbies into
work
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,
thus
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 they follow their passions and dedicate themselves to their jobs. Dedication provides them
a
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superior sense of achievement. As Confucius or someone unknown said, “Choose a
job
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 you love and you will never have to
work
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 a day in your life.”
On the other hand
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, salary has a major effect on gladness because money is essential for livelihood. Employees have to get paid for their
labors
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labours
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 in order to be satisfied and continue to
work
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 with full performance.
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, why should a person
work
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 hard if he can not get his money’s worth?
Nevertheless
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, there might be unreasonable wishes for
job
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satisfaction
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. Some
people
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 want to earn more by working less but you get what you pay for. Others have demands that will not happen from their patrons,
for example
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, working alone in a
job
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 that requires teamwork, having a private driver, or having lunch luxury meals that they can not eat in daily life. They suppose that individual wellbeing will only take place in these circumstances.
Finally
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, there are many causes that to contribute
job
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satisfaction
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. If the following terms will occur, the physical conditions of the place are suitable, connection with
people
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 at
work
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 is good, the
job
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 description is acceptable, employees do their
job
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 fondly, and they get a salary in line with their efforts, contentment will be inevitable even though some
people
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 exaggerate it
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