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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? Give reasons for your answer and give any relevant example or experience you have to support your answer.

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satisfaction
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 is necessary to
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 as it is among the factors that promote good health.There are elements that bestow to
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 ,the reality of contentment to
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today's
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job
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 is very much hanging on the wall.
Job
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satisfaction
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 is a requirement for every worker in our daily living activities, for the purposes of an individuals welfare,there are jobs that tag themselves with a lot of pressure
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 will lead to
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 events in employees
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 reducing on the manpower, because
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 will be hospitalised and with
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 of manpower comes with unfinished
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,burnouts,and poor productivity,
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job
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 will come a long way especially in
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happiness
 of the employee.
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money is not the major factor for
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 safety
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 a point worth considering
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for labourers
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 who earn very minute wages,the employer does not compensate them as they should they
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 with a very bad attitude
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 reflected
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 their daily
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 activities.
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hand
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job
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satisfaction
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 is and can be
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 to all
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workers
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 it just depends
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 the employer and how well they are respected and appreciated for what they do,money is one way of motivating staff
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 brings out the energy in each individual,
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 the
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 will take very good care of the company and its properties,client,employer and employee will be a happy lot and
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 will flow seamlessly with less drama. In
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 Appreciating hired hands by proving
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satisfaction
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 is very much possible,remember appreciation can make a day and
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 change a life,our health will be well taken care of by a simple gesture that comes with
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satisfaction
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