During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessperson who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him/her and he/she suggested that you should contact him/her about a possible job in one of his/her restaurants.

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Dear Mr Oliveira, I am writing

this

letter regarding the job that you offered me during the flight from São Paulo to Rio de Janeiro on September 18 th. I sat down

to you and you told me about a job position in the administrative area. I am extremely interested in accounting or accounts payable jobs since I already have experience in

this

area. Let me introduce you to my career. I graduated with honours from the University of Paulista with a degree in accountancy in 2011. I am currently working at Willis Company where I started as an intern, being responsible for calculating municipal taxes.

As a result

of my effort to the company, in 2015 I was promoted to senior accounting analyst. Not only do my qualifications and work experience make me a perfect candidate for the job, but

also

my personality is well suited to working as a tax manager or finance manager. I am a very focused person and I believe that

this

characteristic is fundamental for these positions.

Besides

that, I believe that working under the pressure with tight deadlines is not a problem for me once I usually work in

this

type of situation. I would like to meet you at your earliest convenience, to discuss the possibility to work in your company. I can be contacted at 55 11 995442244 at any time. Yours faithfully, Raquel Prudente.

Submitted by raquel.santosprudente on Thu Sep 30 2021

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
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0Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

235 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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