Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Parents should help their

children

take part in planned group

activities

while others believe it is a personal responsibility for a child to learn by themselves. I will discuss both views and give my opinion. Organised group

activities

are healthy

activities

that keep

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occupied and busy,Parents are required to guide them in the

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action by themselves,they need an adult who will give them the programme and take them through as well if the young ones are not guided by an adult all they will do is play their games and

activities

will not be on their mind

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what happens in lower classes in schools,during break time

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children

are always accompanied by their teachers and a few

activities

are done with the help of the teachers.

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children

can learn

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activities

on their own with a repeat of the same for some time they just require training and supervision,

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if a group of

children

left alone their minds are not thinking of any planned

activities

but playing their own games so

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will require a long-term process . In conclusion, in my own opinion

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good to train a child early in life to be responsible but it is a process,we need to guide them

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we can allow them

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their stuff as they grow and as we watch and supervise from a distance.