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Some people think employers should not care about the way their employees dress, but the quality at work.

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Every government employee has a different apparel code which is decided by government authority. some people believe that management should not worry about what employee should wear and focus on their productive work while
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 other opines that it is necessary to wear a decent costume at the workplace which is decided by their firm.I firmly believe in
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 view. There are many reasons to wear a particular type of cloth at the office place.
Firstly
,When we maintain a dress code, It shows respect to our work.
Secondly
, When every employee wears a
uniform
 it shows discipline at work.
Finally
, By wearing a
uniform
, people can easily recognize your job profession. To illustrate, We can identify polices , doctors, lawyers and firefighters by their uniforms anywhere in the world.
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,If the company
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 have any
uniform
 or guidelines for their firm, employees will wear whatever they want. Most people will understand that what type of attire is fit for the job while
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 some will not think about it and wear irrelevant clothes which will end up affecting
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the reputation of the company and profession.
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, if no one will guide these types of employees
then
 they don't get the idea that they look unprofessional. To sum up, I totally disagree with the given statement that management does not have to worry about employees attire.It is necessary to wear a decent suit at the workplace and for that employer have their
uniform
 or make some guidelines about the dress
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