IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4

Many employers find that their new employees lack sufficient interpersonal skills such as a lack of ability to work with colleagues as a team. What are the causes? Can you suggest some possible solutions?

#employers #employees #lack #skills #ability #work #colleagues #team
A number of managers find that their new
workers
does
Change the verb form
do
show examples
 not have adequate skill to
work
 with
team
 members. There are numerous reasons behind it
such
 as lack of experience and lack of patience, in order to solve
this
 issue
companies
Change the determiner
company
show examples
 needs to take adequate efforts. There are several reasons behind
this
are
Correct pronoun usage
that are
show examples
 legitimate.
Firstly
, new
employees
 definitely have no
work
 experience, they may face troubles to adjust with other
team
 members, because college
provide
Change the verb form
provides
show examples
 only theoretical knowledge
instead
 of practice.
Secondly
,
Add a hyphen
new-generation
show examples
new
Correct article usage
the new
show examples
 generation
highly
Add a missing verb
is highly
show examples
 dependent on advanced technology to complete their task rather
then
Replace the word
than
show examples
 working with other
co
Add a hyphen
co-workers
show examples
workers
. They feel that
Correct your spelling
teamwork
show examples
team
Correct your spelling
teamwork
show examples
work
 is
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 wastage of time.
Also
, some
employees
 habitual to
work
 alone, they hardly adjust with colleagues. In order to handle the condition organizations need to pay attention
on
Change the preposition
to
show examples
employees
. Primarily, new
employees
 should be given proper training
how
Change preposition
on how
show examples
 to
work
 with co-
workers
. They should
also
explaine
Correct your spelling
explain
explained
 about
advantage
Add an article
the advantage
show examples
 of
team
Correct your spelling
teamwork
show examples
work
 to take the company to
mountains
Correct article usage
the mountains
show examples
. It will not only improve the attitude of
employees
 toward
Correct your spelling
teamwork
show examples
team
Correct your spelling
teamwork
show examples
work
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 but
also
emphasis
Replace the word
emphasise
show examples
 them.for
this
work
. Secondarily, in the college practical is
also
 should be provided as theoretical.
In addition
 to
this
, employers should co-operate with new
workers
also
 teach them rules and regulations of
company
Add an article
the company
show examples
 and built trustworthy relationships with them. To conclude,
although
, unaware about the benefits of
team-
Correct your spelling
teamwork
show examples
work
 and lack of experience are the main reasons, in order to mitigate the problem employers need to be
co- operate
Correct your spelling
co-operate
show examples
 with new
workers
.
Submitted by Sohandeepkaur9327 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: