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Many employers find that their new employees lack sufficient interpersonal skills such as a lack of ability to work with colleagues as a team. What are the causes? Can you suggest some possible solutions?

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A number of managers find that their new
workers
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 not have adequate skill to
work
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 with
team
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 members. There are numerous reasons behind it
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 as lack of experience and lack of patience, in order to solve
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 issue
companies
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 needs to take adequate efforts. There are several reasons behind
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 legitimate.
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, new
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 definitely have no
work
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 experience, they may face troubles to adjust with other
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 members, because college
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 only theoretical knowledge
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 of practice.
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,
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new
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highly
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 dependent on advanced technology to complete their task rather
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then
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 working with other
co
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workers
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. They feel that
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team
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work
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 is
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 wastage of time.
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, some
employees
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 habitual to
work
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 alone, they hardly adjust with colleagues. In order to handle the condition organizations need to pay attention
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employees
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. Primarily, new
employees
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 should be given proper training
how
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on how
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 to
work
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workers
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. They should
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explaine
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 about
advantage
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 of
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team
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teamwork
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work
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 to take the company to
mountains
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. It will not only improve the attitude of
employees
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 toward
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teamwork
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team
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work
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,
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 but
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emphasis
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 them.for
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work
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. Secondarily, in the college practical is
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 should be provided as theoretical.
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 to
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, employers should co-operate with new
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also
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 teach them rules and regulations of
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 and built trustworthy relationships with them. To conclude,
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, unaware about the benefits of
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team-
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work
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 and lack of experience are the main reasons, in order to mitigate the problem employers need to be
co- operate
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co-operate
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 with new
workers
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