Is money or job satisfaction more important to consider when choosing a career?

It is very toughest
situation
choosing
right
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the right

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job
during career start
such
are remuneration, work
satisfaction
etc. Some
people
believe that
employment
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employee

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satisfaction
is more important whilst others prefer high paid jobs. I strongly argue that
pay
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the pay

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scale is important. Discussion on family expenditures, cost of health and
education
, and
post retirement
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post-retirement

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situation
will show
this
.
To begin
, it is difficult to provide at least basic needs for
family
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the family
a family

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such
as food, transport, utility bills, medical expenses, and kids’
education
without
money
. Nowadays kids’
education
becomes very expensive due to
high
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the high

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salaries demanded by highly qualified teachers.
Therefore
, many families are not able to access
to
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reputed schools, some are selling their properties to provide good
education
to their wards.
In addition
to that, it is needless to say about the
situation
of sudden medical emergencies, which requires
lot
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a lot

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of
money
to pay hospital bills. On top of that, some families want to buy
new
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a new

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house
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houses

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, and few want to lead luxury life in spite of their financial conditions due to peer pressure.
Thus
,
this
makes it clear that work
satisfaction
can not help to overcome these issues
Moreover
, leading life after retirement is
also
one of the major concerns.
Hence
people
are trying to earn
money
without giving preference to
employment
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satisfaction
as it gives temporary relief whereas financial burdens impact
people
health and mental stability.
Therefore
, most
of
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the
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families are not ready to face
such
issues.
In addition
to that, It is very difficult to earn after reaching
certain
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a certain

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age, so, one should earn and save
money
when they were young to use it at old age. In many countries, there is no financial support for old age
people
from
government
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the government

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unlike the
situation
in rich counties. As explained these problems can not
be avoid
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be avoided

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by choosing
job
satisfaction
In summary, I am not denying the need
of
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for

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job
satisfaction
but when compared to hardships due to financial problems, it is
very
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a very
the very

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negligible thing. We can overcome those issues caused by
unsatisfaction
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the unsatisfaction

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of
job
by doing yoga, meditation and going
to
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on

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vacation with family and friends.
Thus
, it is clear why
job
satisfaction
can not make us happy in real life
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without

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with out
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without

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more pay. As
this
essay has shown, more pay will make us feel comfortable by supporting our financial needs than
employment
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employee

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satisfaction
.
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