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Some shops are open 24hous a day, 7 days a week. Do you think it is a good thing for the customers, the shop staff and the company as a whole?

Some retailers help their
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 open 24 x 7.In my opinion,
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this
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 benefits customers but not the company much. While for
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employers, it has certain merits as well as demerits. For the consumers, it is very beneficial to have access to
shops
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 that are open 24 hours a day. If they have to purchase anything for
emergency
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, these
shops
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 are always an advantage.
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, very late in the
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, they require some grocery items they can easily buy from these
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. When it comes to the employees of
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 retail
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 there are certain advantages as well as disadvantages. Longer open hours means workers would get their overtime and can earn a little extra income.
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, the working hours would be more and
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 could become lethargic as well. So it is neither positive nor negative for the company
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. Looking at the company’s point of view, it does not increase their profits, despite
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keeping their
stores
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 open through day and
night
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.
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night
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 there might not be many customers, yet the staff must be paid for working throughout the
night
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. Ultimately, the profit they would gain by keeping the
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 open would be lesser
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that
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then
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 expense they would face in paying the
staffs
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.
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, during the weekends depending on the
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 the customer traffic could be higher and it may result in some profits. In conclusion, the buyers would have advantages due to 24 x 7 open
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,
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, not for the relatives. For working staff, it is a toss-up.

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