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Films are no longer exclusively produced by big companies. Digital technology has enabled everybody to create their own video(s) and film(s). Is it a positive or a negative development?

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In the modern era, the technology of
films
 gradually becomes obsolete as it is replaced by
the
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digital innovation, which contributes
people
 to easily taking
photos
 and making videos. In
this
 essay, I will provide both benefits and
drawback
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drawbacks
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 of
this
 circumstance and express my opinion toward
this
 overview.
To begin
, There are 2 main benefits to support the advantages of
the
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digital development including convenience and
cost saving
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.
First
 of all, in order to take
photos
,
people
 not only need to buy a camera to record the
pictures
, but they
also
 need to buy
flims
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films
, which are so expensive, and less number in that time. Nowadays, the digital camera enables photographers to infinitely take
the
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photos
 without spending
a
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vast money for buying
films
. They can keep a thousand
of
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pictures
in
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 a small memory card or a portable hard disk.
Secondly
, digital technology provides
the
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facilitation to all
people
. As in the past, taking
photos
 and recording videos by
films
 are too difficult for ordinary
people
, and need the person who
have
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films
 related
expertises
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 and experiences, whereas recently individuals even a 6 years old child can take
photos
 and make videos
by
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 just a click on
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a smart
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smart phone
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.
Therefore
,
the
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digital development is considered
as
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a positive aspect.
However
, digital cameras
also
 have a drawback. Due to easily use without paying for the extra
films
,
people
 do not appreciate the value of the
pictures
 compared to those being taken by the
films
 cameras. In the past, in order to shoot a photo, photographers need to make sure that the
pictures
 that they take will be perfect as a
flim
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film
 was
high
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 cost so the taken photo is always appreciated. While, nowadays,
mobile
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 phone allows
people
 to take a hundred
people
 and select the best picture later.
As a result
,
people
 do not realize the value of
photos
 as in the past. In conclusion, presumably,
the
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digital development, which replaces
the
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film technology, is positive because its benefits
outnumbers
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 its drawbacks according to
aforementioned
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 reasons.
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