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Directors of large organizations earn much higher salaries than ordinary employees do. Some people think it is necessary, but others are of the opinion that it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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Earning a high paycheck, in
this
 contemporary era, is a dream of everyone. It is believed by a few individuals that leaders of big giant companies have high
income
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 unlike other employees, which is quintessential
while
 others assert that it is unjustifiable.
This
 essay will discuss not only both views
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 but
also
 reasons to justify the former view as more fruitful. Commencing with pre-eminent favourable aspects of maximum earnings of higher management in an organisation. The first tenable etiology is that salary is decided on the basis
as
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 the higher authority is responsible
to set
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 the vision and
take
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 crucial decisions.
As top-tier
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 officials not only possess the talent to work on visionary tasks
such
 as managing different projects,
hiring
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 the right candidate, but
also
 show the greatest contribution to run the company, by dint of which higher salaries are bestowed to them by the authority. In
I.T
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IT
 companies,
for instance
, 90% of directors are achieving extremely high salaries because they have remarkable qualities to make it done;
Therefore
, owing to the pivotal role in a firm , it is imperative to impart high wages to chief executives.
On the other hand
, certain people think that it is not justifiable to provide a 10 times higher salary to the manager,
senior
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 officials. The main reason for
this
 thought is the employee's mindset.
In other words
, a regular professional, who works much harder and even
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 extra hours for the success of the organization, feels demotivated as they do not obtain higher salaries. In conclusion,
albeit
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 a regular employee feels demotivated by seeing the disparity in salary structure, top-level employees possess unique qualities to run the company smoothly, which is essential to be successful in the market.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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