Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Without a
doubt
there are vast differences between well-to-do families and families who struggle day Add a comma
,doubt
to day
. Correct your spelling
today
This
is especially apparent in children
’s development which manifest
in their adulthood. Change the verb form
manifests
For those
who grew up in a comfortable home environment, Change preposition
Those
they
have more opportunities to develop their skills and confidence and can benefit from their parent’s extensive network. Correct pronoun usage
apply
However
, this
is not always the case as money
is not the only important factor; Add an article
the money
attitude
places a part
as well.
Wealthy Correct your spelling
apart
parents
are able to send their children
to enrichment classes
that boost their skills and confidence. Enrichment classes
are not necessary however
the positive impacts of such
classes
drive parents
to splurge on them. These positive impacts include excellent speaking ability, high levels of confidence and increased intellect. For
example
, children
who go for expensive and well-known speech and drama classes
regularly tend to achieve self-assurance and determination. Another example
is when parents
send children
for additional tuition classes
that raises
their academic capability. When these Change the verb form
raise
children
perform well academically, their certificates put them steps ahead of their peers. Hence
, children
in wealthy families have lower chances of battling challenges in their adulthood.
Wealthy parents
can use their influence and connections to their advantage by increasing their child’s prospects in their working life
. Children
of these parents
are given better working opportunities for reasons such
as a
personal favour or business deals. Correct article usage
apply
For
example
, influential friends of wealthy parents
may favour their children
over other equally qualified candidates. This
happens when parents
communicate their intentions for their child to be given the opportunity and their request is obliged out of personal relations. This
shows how good
network breaks down barriers that Correct article usage
a good
children
face when they are entering the working world as adults, therefore
reaffirming the idea that wealth and connections have great benefits for children
.
Although
money and wealth can prove to be life changing
, Add a hyphen
life-changing
attitude
is equally, if not more, important. Children
born with a silver spoon have been presented with opportunities and platforms that helps
to get them to where they are throughout their entire Change the verb form
help
life
. Hard work and attitude
draws the line between success and failure. One example
to potray
Correct your spelling
portray
this
situation is Warner in the movie legally blonde. He was built with a false sense of security as his family has always been successful and influential poleticians
and yet he barely scrape through law school because he was not as hardworking and neither does he have the right Correct your spelling
politicians
attitude
to succeed as a senator. This
is a classic yet comical example
that silver platters are not everything. Therefore
children
need much more than enrichment classes
and network
to overcome challenges when they are older.
In Fix the agreement mistake
networks
conclusion
it is true that money does make the world go round, the defining and differentiating factor will still be the Add a comma
,conclusion
attitude
that one has towards life
and the obstacles that they
face.Correct pronoun usage
one
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