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Mixed charts | The percentage of water consumption and use in Australia in 2004

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The pie
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 provides data on
the
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water
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 consumption in 5 different categories and the bar
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 gives information about the distribution of residential
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use
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 as percentages in Australia, in 2004. Overall, it might be clearly regarded as the residential
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use
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 has the greatest cut with %70.
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, according to the bar
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, garden and bathroom
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 are the categories in which
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water
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use
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 is on top levels. In 2004, %70 of
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use
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 belonged to residential
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, which occupies the largest cut in the pie
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.
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 of
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 in industry and business were following the residential
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 with nearly equal percentages of %11 and %1o, respectively. The category with the least percentage is ‘others’ including the
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 other than indicated categories. The largest portion in the given bar
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 belongs to bathroom and garden
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, which are almost equal with the percentages of %27 and %28, respectively.
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kitchen
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 is the area in which
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water
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use
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 is at the lowest percentage of %10.
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, the
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 consumption accounted for
%
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20, while toilets consumed %15 of total residential
water
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