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The government should allocate more funding to teaching science rather than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress to what extent do you agree

#government #science #subjects #country #progress
This
 table chart depicts the different countries
sale
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sales
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 of Fair-trade-labelled
coffee
 and bananas in the
year
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years
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 1999 and 2004. Units are measured in millions of
euros
. Overall, once upon
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time
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 Denmark sold
highest
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the highest
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 number of
coffee
 while the
UK
slightly
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 behind
from
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Denmark, which
was beat
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 by the
UK
 after some years, while Sweden sold
lowest
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the lowest
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.
Banana
 sold by Switzerland was highest in both years. In terms of
coffee
, the
UK
 sold 20
millions
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million
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of
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euros
coffee
 in 2004 which was almost doubled from remained country’s together sold.
On the other hand
,
banana
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the banana
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 was sold by Switzerland highest in 1999 and 2004 which was almost 3 and 4 times higher than other countries together sold. Sweden sold
lowest
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the lowest
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coffee
 in both years 0.8 and 1 million
of
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euros
 respectively.
On the other hand
, the
UK
 sold
lowest
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the lowest
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banana
 in 1999 (1 million
of
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euros
), while Sweden sold
lowest
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the lowest
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 0.9 million
of
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euros
banana
 in 2004
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