CCTV cameras are a common sight in town centres, on public transport and outside many businesses. They not only help identify and apprehend criminals but also serve as a crime deterrent. However, some people believe that they are intrusive and constitute a breach of privacy. What do you feel is more important, personal privacy or public safety?

Everyone wants to feel a sense of safety in their everyday life. In modern ,society it is very important to have some self-defence items for your own sake,
although
it is still not enough to call yourself being safe. For extra security environment decided to use the most popular gadget of everybody's daily routine - a camera. It provides us with the feeling that in case of emergency someone could see and send help to an injured citizen, but the primitive form of the camera did not allow to have continuous look at an object, so scientists, engineers and physicists renovated, upgraded and created a more professional and sophisticated version of the gadget which is widely used in crowded locations. It surely stabilized the level of criminalism, but there is an opinion that it constitutes a breach of
privacy
.
This
opinion is not wrong
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but
also
is not true. Since it aims at public safety, it
also
includes personal
privacy
. Everything for citizens' sake. Sure, there might be somebody who might break the
privacy
, even though I strongly believe that public safety is more important than personal
privacy
as the
second
one comes from the
first
one. I rest my case.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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