CCTV cameras are a common sight in town centres, on public transport and outside many businesses. They not only help identify and apprehend criminals but also serve as a crime deterrent. However, some people believe that they are intrusive and constitute a breach of privacy. What do you feel is more important, personal privacy or public safety?

Throughout the
world
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many countries provided their crowded areas with
CCTV
cameras
which are beneficial in order to identify
the
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criminals and solve a
crime
.
In contrast
to its benefits, many people worry about their
privacy
and can not trust
to
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the
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CCTV
.
This
essay will discuss the arguments supporting the importance of public safety rather than personal
privacy
.
First
of all, the main purpose of
CCTV
cameras
is solving
crime
, identifying
suspisious
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suspicious
actions and preventing their
repeatence
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repentance
. Modern technologies give an opportunity to find out
the
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information about criminals by matching identities and analyse their history of
crime
. As an example, the world rate of the most
safety
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countries with the lowest value of
crime
shows that South Korea is estimated as the safest country. The reason for
this
value is explained by the appearance of
CCTV
cameras
everywhere in the country. South Korea is provided
by
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the latest technical equipment and
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cameras
have a significant role in their social life because all of the
crime
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crimes
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are being solved by
work
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the work
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of
cameras
even in rural areas.
Secondly
, the
CCTV
camera
are
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loaded by
government
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the government
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with
appreciation
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an appreciation
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of
privacy
laws. Street
cameras
are used only in case of alarm
situation
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situations
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and looking for someone particular. In everyday
life
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it is hard to match the street
cameras
. Despite the fact that
are
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always turned on, people will worry about their
privacy
, but an accident would happen suddenly and anywhere. Considering all the arguments mentioned below, the
CCTV
camera are actions to avoid a
crime
,
therefore
public safety can overweight personal
privacy
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