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Percentage of UK people who consumed daily recommended amount of fruit and vegetable in 2002, 2006 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The bar diagram illustrates the daily recommended intake of fruits and vegetables in percentage among gents, ladies and kids for the
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 2002, 2006 and 2010 in the UK. Overall, more ladies obeyed doctors' advice and follow healthy protocol compare to gents and kids. In 2002, women consumed 25
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 of the daily suggested value of fruit and vegetable intake whereas, men were slightly behind to 22
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 and children were half than men.
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 in 2006, a slight increase was observed among all three categories by 4% in male and 7% each in female and children.
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 in 2010, a slight downward trend was monitored in all categories and reached very close to 2002 level respectively 24%, 26% and 16% in men, women and children.
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