You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter Give details of your study plans Explain why you want to get a part-time job Suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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Dear Maria, I hope you are in a good health as soon as you got

this

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letter. I am writing to you to share that I got in the East High University where you are studying as well. I am

also

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asking if you can help me to find a part-time job while I am studying.

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with,

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week I received a letter that I passed in East High University. They want me to report as soon as can to fix everything regarding my papers

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since I am accepted in their special program in management course. It is a two-year course, and

usually

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I am free

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weekends,

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I can use that to work. I checked online the nearest

accomodation

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I can get and sad to say I can't afford because it is too expensive, the food I think I can still manage since I know how to cook and by preparing meals it will save the cost. I have my savings,

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however

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it will not be covered

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two years, so I need a part-time to cover my expenses. I thought about you, when we had

conversation

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time

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if you can suggest if there are openings that I can apply to or any jobs available in the restaurant your working

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will be a big help for me. If

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possible if you can enquire for me as soon as possible so I can send any requirements they needed. I will be waiting for your response. Thank you for considering. Regards, Julianne

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

261 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Educational aspirations
Work experience
Financial independence
Resume (or CV)
Local job market
International student
Legal requirements
Student work permit
Employment trends
Time management
Networking
A part-time position
Balance studies and work
Job hunting strategies

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