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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Currently, there is an abundance of competent graduates who are not simply capable of finding a job. One of the factors could be that people do not possess sufficient practical skills, or they are simply not interested to work in their profession. In
this
 essay, I will examine why the issue of unemployment is an urgent one among alumni and suggest a couple of possible remedies for tackling
this
 problem. The current labour market trend does not allow grads to start working immediately after graduation. Indeed, the employers are interested in a labour force that already possesses sufficient practical skills, whereas the majority of students did not even have an opportunity to have a proper internship.
For example
, graduates in economics are required to have 2-3 years of working experience in the related field: for the majority, it is an unrealistic prospect. One of the solutions,
however
, could be an obligatory internship for all students which is going to enhance their practical and theoretical skills. The universities should work in closer cooperation with the employers to meet not only their needs but
also
 the needs of the employees. The
next
 point of concern is that a plethora of former students
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 not work in their profession. Indeed, higher education is a useful tool for the majority;
however
, a number of these people were forced to acquire a certain degree which they did not even like.
For instance
, if I had had an opportunity to choose on my own, I would not have studied engineering at the Tallinn University of Technology after high school. It is vital to ensure that youth will decide by themselves what type of degree they want to get
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 since modern jobs already have become irrelevant in our fast-changing world. The more opportunities a young adult has, the fewer unemployed graduates will become.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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