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While your friend was away on vacation, you stayed in his apartment. While you were there, you dropped an expensive bowl and broke it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, - explain what happened - apologise for the accident - tell your friend what you plan to do about the bowl

#friend #vacation #apartment #bowl #apologise #accident #plan
Dear Tricia, Hope
your
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you're
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 enjoying your vacation with your family and
your
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 in a good health as you receive
this
 letter. I am writing to you because I wanted to tell you something.
To begin
 with, I want to thank you for letting me stay in your apartment while you're gone. But I am so sorry to tell you that I broke the expensive bowl that you bought in Thailand
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last
 trip we had. What really happened is, I was cleaning the room yesterday, and by
accident
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 it slipped through my hands while lifting it up. I tried to fix it right away and I even asked someone here, but unfortunately, they cannot do it since it is broken into small pieces. I went to an antique shop in town to check if there is anything with the same design but I am upset because they do not have one. I am really sorry about it and I know how you valued things so I deeply apologise for what happened.
However
, I am trying to get it replaced as my cousin will go to Thailand
next
 week,
thus
 it will take time since he will be back
next
 month. I wish I will get it before u come back from your vacation. I hope you're not mad, I will be more careful
next
 time. Thank you again. Yours truly, Dian
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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