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In some places, fast food, prepared meals, and sugary drinks are now sold in more shops and at lower prices than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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These days fast
food
 is getting popular among people. Most of the stores prepare them fast and sell them at reasonable prices. In my opinion, developing in the fast-
food
 industry can damage our health more than the benefits that we receive from it. On the one hand, there are some benefits to using fast
food
 .
firstly
, it prepares quickly, so
instead
 of spending a lot of time making
food
 in the kitchen like in the past, it might save our time for other reasons.
For example
, we may be more productive in the workplace because thinking about what we should make for lunch, dinner, or other meals distract our energy from focusing on work to other things.
Also
, we could spend more time with our family or any persons that we love them with
such
 as our kids, parents or friends.
Secondly
, the fast-
food
 industry is one of the most prominent entrepreneurs in the world. Millions of people are working in
this
 industry and have income. As an example, many international students work in fast
food
 for the
first
 year of study and pay their university tuition via
this
 kind of job.
As a result
, fast
food
 might have advantages that we should not ignore.
On the other hand
, there are several reasons why fast
food
 is harmful to our health.
Firstly
, it has full of fat and calories. So, it often causes gaining weight.
For instance
, one Macdonald's cheeseburger has a 600-kilo calories fat
that is
 too high
in contrast
 to healthy foods
such
 as salads or fruits that are full of nutrients.
Secondly
,Most fast
food
 has a high salt that causes blood pressure. I remember Whenever my mother ate fast
food
, her blood pressure went up, and sometimes we had to call an emergency helper.
Finally
,High fat in fast
food
 is the cause of high Clostrol in people, elderly particularly and cause of heart attack, so well-being problems are more important than other aspects of fast
food
's advantages. In conclusion, while fast
food
 maybe has benefits, especially for entrepreneurs, its damages are more bad effect on our health. ..
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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