Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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,marital status and leisure time management are some of the
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that employers seek to know about before giving a job offer.Though some people take it positive others criticize it and prefer that it is better if
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can be omitted.In
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essay,we shall explore both sides and a personal view will be stated at the end of the discussion.
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with,it is important for the
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to know the marital status of a person and their interests before employing them, in
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order
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,medical covers issued by the
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are paid depending on whether the
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is single or has a family.
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,some social habits if adopted as
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hobby can hinder the
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from meeting the
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goals.It is
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important for the
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to know the kind of hobby that an
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has
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in before employing them.
In contrast
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,
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can be used as an avenue for bias.People with hobbies
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are not the employers
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interest
can be denied an equal chance of getting a job compared with those possessing the interest of the
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.An example is a person whose hobby is travelling and is seeking an
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employment
as a teacher.He or she can be
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badly
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judged that they will use class time in their hobbies and
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poor performance. In
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conclusion
,it is important for the
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to have an overview of the nature of the person coming to work for them in order to have
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excellent human resource management.
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,
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should not be used to discriminate subjects against their opponents and all the people should be given an equal opportunity to exercise their freedom
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separately
from work relations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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