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Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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,marital status and leisure time management are some of the
information
 that employers seek to know about before giving a job offer.Though some people take it positive others criticize it and prefer that it is better if
such
information
 can be omitted.In
this
 essay,we shall explore both sides and a personal view will be stated at the end of the discussion.
To begin
 with,it is important for the
employer
 to know the marital status of a person and their interests before employing them, in
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order
 to plan for the social aspect of the
employee
.
For example
,medical covers issued by the
employer
 are paid depending on whether the
employee
 is single or has a family.
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,some social habits if adopted as
an
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 hobby can hinder the
employee
 from meeting the
employers
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 goals.It is
then
 important for the
employer
 to know the kind of hobby that an
employee
 has
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 in before employing them.
In contrast
,
such
information
 can be used as an avenue for bias.People with hobbies
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 are not the employers
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interest
 can be denied an equal chance of getting a job compared with those possessing the interest of the
employer
.An example is a person whose hobby is travelling and is seeking an
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employment
 as a teacher.He or she can be
biasly
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badly
biased
 judged that they will use class time in their hobbies and
hence
 poor performance. In
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conclusion
,it is important for the
employer
 to have an overview of the nature of the person coming to work for them in order to have
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excellent human resource management.
However
,
such
information
 should not be used to discriminate subjects against their opponents and all the people should be given an equal opportunity to exercise their freedom
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separately
 from work relations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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