It is believed that people should choose their jobs based on income in order to provide security for their families. Do you agree that the salary is an important factor when choosing a job? What other factors should be considered?
In the present
generation
a great stake of people Add a comma
,generation
choose
work based on Change the verb form
chooses
it's
Replace the word
its
pay
scale so that they could secure their family needs rather than the job satisfaction. Add an article
a pay
Correct your spelling
I
In
do not agree with the given statement due to the fact that though Correct your spelling
I
money
aids in accumulating materialistic goods it does not provide mental peace. Moreover
, there are many other things to be considered such
as learning opportunities, growth and immensely important
of all Replace the word
importance
that is
interest.
To begin
with, People especially fresh graduates join the companies even though their educational backgrounds and interests are of no match to the duties they perform. Firstly
, the foremost reason is to get paid Correct your spelling
in order
inorder
Correct your spelling
in order
Fix the infinitive
to fulfill
fulfill
their basic Change the spelling
fulfil
necesseties
Correct your spelling
necessities
such
as food,shelter and clothing. Secondly
, in multiple cases they just do it in order earn
certain pocket Fix the infinitive
to earn
money
just for their fun activities which are partying, shopping and vacations. However
, all these things are only short term and does
not resonate the same vibes over a long period of time. Change the verb form
do
For instance
, I myself is an example for
Change preposition
of
this
scenario. I have joined a software MNC even though my
it was not what Correct pronoun usage
apply
i
wanted just t Change the capitalization
I
have
the feel of being employed and Add the particle
to have
get
financially free quickly. But, Wrong verb form
getting
overtime
Correct your spelling
over time
thing's
Fix the agreement mistake
things's
changed
and the role feels more tedious than enjoyable.Replace the word
change
Thus
, never do something just to get paid.
On the other hand
, interest plays a pivotal role while working owning to the fact that it is what that
keeps us motivated on daily basis. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Secondly
, the other factor is growth has to be considered as it very
significant in paving Add a missing verb
is very
path
to the future.Add an article
the path
a path
Moreover
, it dictates pay scale. This
could either cause a surge or might plunge the existing money
. To illustrate it further
, Sachin who was a school dropout from a below poverty line family pursued his dream of playing cricket. Eventhough
, he received only a minimal amount his passion is what has driven him to become the most admirable person.
To conclude, Correct your spelling
Even though
Money
diverts people to take the duties away from their core interests just to give the
ability to feed their beloved. Correct pronoun usage
them the
However
, there's more than that which makes humans to
work which would inspire them to be more genuine to themselves.Change the verb form
apply
Submitted by manojvamc on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?