Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that
History
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should be prioritised when it
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to
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classes while others suggest that
Science
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related subjects are more crucial.
This
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will
demostates
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demonstrate
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that teaching
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in educational
instututes
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institutes

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can teach the younger generation
avoid
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mistakes made in the past. And
then
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explains
importance
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the importance

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of the scientific education since it fosters new live-improving innovations.
In contrast
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with
assumption
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the assumption
an assumption

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of the general public, teaching
history
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in
school
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is
nessesary
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necessary

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for building a better future. The reason is that
,
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apply

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pupils can learn about mistakes that humankind made in the past.
In other
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words
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students can avoid doing the same wrong-doing their previous generation did.
This
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agrees with
this
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and
encourage
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encourages

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student
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the student
a student

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to participate in the said subject.
For example
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, educating
childen
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children

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about the discrimination
happened
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that happened

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few
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a few

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decades ago can
reduces
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reduce

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racisms and hate crimes in
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Science
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relate
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relates

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subject
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subjects

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like Technology and Engineering are play an important role in improving human life. The future of
human
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humans

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is
depents
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depends

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on scientists and engineers to create innovations.
This
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cannot happen if we are not teaching
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is
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in

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school
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Therefore
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this
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supports teaching
science
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in all educational
instututes
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institutes

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For instance
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, nowadays
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the lastest
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lastest
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latest

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renenable
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renewable

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energy technologies are invented in engineering colleges around the world. In conclusion,
History
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is a subject that guides us to
the
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better future without making the same mistake,
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it is mandatory for education,
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educations are
also
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important because they are foster advanced technologies that improve living conditions.
As a
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result
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purposes that both subjects are
equaly
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important and should be
madated
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mandated
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for
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  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
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  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
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  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
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