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The given table provides information about the carbon dioxide emissions in 5 countries, namely China,
USA
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, Russia, India and
Japan
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, in the Year 2006. Overall, it appears that, while each American released about 5 times as much CO2 as a China's resident, both countries were the highest ones in total CO2 productions among all.
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, India has the lowest CO2 emission per person and the total figure was the most Conservative for
Japan
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.
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, all areas had shown rising trends, with the noticeable exception of the
USA
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, which had a downward trajectory. In terms of amounts of the CO2 emissions per individual,
USA
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 was the
first
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 country by 19.8
million
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tonnes
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. Russia was the
second
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 one by approximately an 8
million
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 margin. Regarding
Japan
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,
this
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 country had emitted half of that of the
USA
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.
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, each Chinese had accounted for 4.6
million
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tonnes
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 and India ,with 1.4
million
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,
tonnes
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 had the lowest amounts of CO2 per resident. Looking specifically at total
tonnes
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 and changes from 2005 to 2006,
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 the
USA
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 had the highest some (5487
tonnes
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) in 2005, it was reduced by 2%, reached 5540
tonnes
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.
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, the
second
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 Close region, China, had increased significantly (11)% and surpassed the
USA
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, made up 5900
tonnes
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 in 2006.
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, having a 1.1% surge,
Japan
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 was the most conservative region in total CO2 production during the one-year period, standing around 1200
million
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tonnes
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.
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 Russia joined the similar upward trend,
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 area by 0.6% had seen the least variations over the said period.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender stereotypes
  • societal views
  • inherent biases
  • professional capabilities
  • gender inclusivity
  • equal opportunities
  • diversity
  • unique perspectives
  • physical attributes
  • psychological attributes
  • workplace adaptations
  • modern advancements
  • legal frameworks
  • gender discrimination
  • ethical implications
  • career opportunities
  • case studies
  • real-world examples
  • traditionally dominated
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