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Recent research has shown that within the European Union the largest difference between the earnings of men and women exists in the UK. Many equal rights campaigners believe that immediate action should be taken to close the gender pay gap. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Gender
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 inequality has been one of the most debated topics. Recent researchers have inferred that the difference between the earnings of
men
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 and
women
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 is huge in the UK. Eventually, equal rights activists believe that the government ought to propose a solution for
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 immediately. I agree that the
gender
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 pay gap should be eradicated as at
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 every employee is treated equally. To commence with, one of the prominent reasons behind making equal wages mandatory is that both
men
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 and
women
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 exercise the same job responsibilities irrespective of their
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.
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, paying fewer wages to
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 as compared to
men
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 is an unjustifiable practice. Even though female employees outperform males they are still paid less.
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, these days many managerial positions in MNCs in the UK are occupied by
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 and
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 get recognised for their good
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. In
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 cases, paying them equal to
men
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 will encourage them to continue the same.
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,
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 at
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 perform well compared to
men
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.
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, they have to be encouraged by giving them higher increments.
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, these days bigger companies like Microsoft prefer to hire
women
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 employees in order to promote
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 equality and encourage them to
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. It would promote equality if all are paid on the basis of the
work
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 they do rather than the
gender
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. It is indeed an advantage to the companies if the top performer is encouraged. To conclude, salary, when paid based on the performance and the number of responsibilities undertaken will promote equality rather than paying based on
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, as there will always be low performers among
men
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. Paying
women
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 less than
men
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 for the same set of responsibilities is an injustice and has to be stopped immediately.

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