some people say History is one of most important school subjects other people think that, in today world, subject like science and technology are more important than History

Nowadays,
history
is a
familiraty
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familiarity
with various children generation and
besides
that
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the developing society bases on
techonology
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technology
and
science
is more and more a main
factors
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.
Therefore
, whether
History
is more crucial than
science
and
tecchnology
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technology
or they are
oposite
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opposite
. I will
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illustrate
my opinion
two
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aspects in
this
essay.
First
of all,
History
is a material which guides us to know how our growing life of ancestors, animals and plants as well as victories and debates for a long time. Thanks to
this
gives
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us a full of happiness and
gratefullness
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gratefulness
to live now. To get these days, we experienced
many
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hard
time
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times
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to gain freedom and better than before so much.
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, we know how our world
have
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developed from back to now
bases
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based
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on
imagies
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images
image
or books, newspapers,... and that's all our
history
.
Secondly
,
history
illutrates
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illustrates
how technology and
science
are more and more critical
such
as phones, computers, planes,...Obviously,
this
world is more modern than the past so people
is
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are
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, our mind is
also
smarter and have many
chancellenge
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challenge
so technology and
sciene
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science
have to follow us.
Enoumous
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Enormous
smartphones,
laptpops
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laptops
, computers are advanced to serve our demand.
For instance
, if
history
doesn't
exstinct
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extinct
, we certainly don't know the technology and
science
before and couldn't invent many modern tools like
this
. All in all,
history
is a basis to build a
wealth
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world , without
history
is without us.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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