Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects other people think that, in today's world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history to what extent do you agree or did agree.

Education plays a pivotal role
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every person life and they have to learn
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in
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school
.
Although
it is sometimes thought history is
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subject, others believed that
science
and
technology
are more essential. In my opinion, I considered that
school
should be focused more on
science
and
technology
, but the importance of history should not be neglected. There are several reasons why
science
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in the
Univesisty
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,
first
and for
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important thing is research and experiment. Increasing the competition
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regarding space and exploration
amon
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among
all countries.
Therefore
, the country needs more
scientist
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and it would be possible when students learn
science
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school
. Another point to consider is that
technology
can teach the children more about the use of electronic gadgets as it is helpful in
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scenario.
For instance
, people can not live without the use of mobile and
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in the
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world, and they need to obtain
this
knowledge.
Hence
,
technolgy
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technology
has become
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part
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the world.
On the other hand
,
school
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should teach to the
students
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history because it can give more information about the past.
Moreover
, students can gain
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knowledge about geography from
hisory
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history
. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinion, I think that children stand a better chance to excel for
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if they are taught
science
and
technology
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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