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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#salary #job #satisfaction
It is always a debatable issue that whether a high payscale is important or a satisfactory
job
.Some
people
 argue the importance of a whopping salary no matter if they enjoy their
job
 or not.I completely disagree with the statement as I feel a person doing a
job
 where they can enjoy their
work
 even if it pays less gives them more satisfaction.
To begin
 with, Working at a place without willingness will create a forceful environment for employees just for the need of money. They will be disappointed about their
job
 every day and frustrated from start to the end of the day. I personally,
for instance
, wake up forcefully to go to
work
 after cursing myself several times.
For example
, a survey in the US shows that 80 per cent of
people
 do not like their
job
 which fills their account heavily.
Hence
, it makes the need for a satisfactory
job
.
Furthermore
, Working at an unsatisfactory
job
 is not good for a person's health.
People
 start feeling unhappy which leads to depression in life.
In other words
, They can't enjoy their after-
work
 life as well which creates a gap between their relationship with their partner and children.
For instance
, It can be seen through various examples of divorce which happened majorly in high earning couples.
Moreover
, It is undeniable that
people
 who
work
 in fulfilled career, are more productive than others as
work
 after working hours as well even it profits them or not. In conclusion, after deliberating the reasons for my disagreement it can state succinctly that working at a low scale satisfactory
job
 if more peaceful. .
Submitted by Gursharan910 on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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