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You are working in a school. Write a letter to the Principal to recommend your friend for the position of sports teacher in your school. In your letter – say how long you have known him/her – describe his/her qualifications – explain why you think he/she would be suitable for the job.

#school #friend #position #sports #teacher #qualifications #job
Respected Principal, I recently came to know that, there is a vacancy for
sports
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a sports
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 teacher in our Institute. I am writing
this
 letter to suggest
you
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 a person who is a perfect match for
this
 role. He is my Childhood friend Ramesh Bhatt, living in
Udaipur
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the Udaipur
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 district of Rajasthan. Presently He is a Zumba instructor and a
Gym
 Trainer
since
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 7 years in World
Gym
 situated in his city. He
also
 trains some orphan
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children
children's
childrens
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children
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 and students in gymnastics, nearby the alley he lives. Regardless of his
skills
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 he is not being paid much at the
gym
. The main part is few of our students
also
 go to training for
zumba
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 with him. Based on his experience in the sports field. I firmly believe that his skills in Zumba and
Gym
 would be best utilized
,
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 if we offer him a job
for
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as
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 our Sports Mentor. Hoping for
a
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consideration of my suggestion. Thanks and regards Vrushal Chotaliya
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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