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the world’s water and the use of water in three various sectors in Egypt, Saudi Arabia and Canada.

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The given pie charts and line graph illustrate the information about the world’s
water
 and the use of
water
 in three various sectors in Egypt, Saudi Arabia and Canada. The general overview here is that the most of
water
 in the world was saltwater, while ice and glaciers
was
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 the majority of freshwater, and The greatest amount of
water
 was used in Agriculture
sectorin
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sector in
sector
 Egypt and Saudi Arabia, Whereas Canada used the highest of
water
 in Industry
sector
. According to the pic charts, it can be seen that Saltwater was the most in the number of world’
water
, accounting for 97%
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 to freshwater at only 3%.
Moreover
, freshwater indicated 79% of ice and glaciers which
higher
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 more than
ground
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groundwater
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water
 and surface
water
 at 20% and only 1%. Turning to the bar chart, it is clear that Egypt and Saudi Arabia shared a similar figure for the
water
 used
of
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agricultural
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the agricultural
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sector
 which accounted for over 70%. Neither two countries experienced minimal figures of its
water
 used in
domestic
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the domestic
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sector
 and industrial
sector
. Canada,
on the contrary
, the most of
water
 was used in
industry
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the industry
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sector
, with the figure almost 80%, while domestic
sector
 and agricultural
sector
 used the lower at just over 10% and under 10% respectively.
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