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ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You and your family are planning to spend a weekend at a seaside hotel. Write a letter to the hotel, making the arrangements. In your letter tell them when you will be arriving and leaving explain what type of rooms you would like, and ask how much the weekend will cost ask about activities and places of interest near the hotel You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#ou #minutes #weekend #hotel #arrangements #type #rooms #cost #activities #places #interest #addresses #sir #madam
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to make an arrangement
of
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for
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 a room at your hotel
on
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 the weekend, from 7th
july
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July
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 to 8th
july
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July
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. We will come early in the morning around 7:00 a.m. on 7th
july
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July
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 and will leave the hotel on 8th
july
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July
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. We are three
person
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, so we require a family room where we can feel comfortable and enjoy our journey peacefully and
also
, please make one single
bad
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bed
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seperated
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separated
 for my son. I would like to know the total cost of my stay, so I can take the decision as soon as
and
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possible and
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 pay you instantly.
Moreover
, I am coming there for the first time and really do not know the good places to visit, so please
advice
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 me
some
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of some
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 places for me and
son
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my son
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 where we can go and get a chill and make our tour memorable. Looking forward to hearing from you.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Ankit Patel
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task achievement
The response generally completes the task, but be sure to fully answer all parts. Clarify any points that might be ambiguous, like specifying the exact number of nights or the configuration of the beds.
coherence cohesion
Use paragraphs to clearly separate different sections of your letter. For instance, use a new paragraph for arrival details, room preferences, and asking about local activities.
coherence cohesion
Ensure you use consistent dates and times. The transition between arrival time and room preferences could be smoother for better flow.
task achievement
The tone is appropriate and polite, suitable for a formal letter to a hotel.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing remarks are appropriate, which adds to the overall coherence and polite tone of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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