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The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The line chart illustrates the users of the gym in 5 years interval from 1980 to 2010 displayed by gender. Overall, there are more men than women who use the sports
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 girls are the majority in 2010 and between 1990 and 2000.
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, a big variation is found with the number of masculine people. In the beginning, male members were double with 2000 people while female ones were 1000. After that, they both increased to reach 4000 and 2000 in 1985. From 1985 to 1995, boys dived steadily by over 50 % to almost 1500 while female users fluctuate from 2000 to 3000, and the peak was at roughly 3000 members. Before a dramatic decrease in the
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 five years to the lowest point, men reached the highest (5000) in 2005 after rising more than 2,5 times. In the end, males comprise less than 30 % of users meanwhile females are just under 2000.
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  • gender equality
  • historical context
  • gender pay gap
  • underrepresentation
  • leadership roles
  • gender-based violence
  • educational opportunities
  • workforce
  • legal reforms
  • statistics
  • case studies
  • global perspective
  • progressive changes
  • cultural differences
  • empowerment
  • patriarchy
  • systemic discrimination
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