You and a friend have both been accepted to a study abroad program in Paris, France. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: •Congratulate him/her for also being accepted •Ask him/her if he/she would like to be your roommate •Discuss possible activities that the two of you could do together

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Dear Stephen, I am writing to you to celebrate

success

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of our acceptance at the foreign education program in Paris. Here are my purposes for writing you

this

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letter. At

first,

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can't

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be happier for you that you'll be part of my learning journey again. You can really be proud of yourself as

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university is one of the top institutions of the world, which

produce

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best

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graduates, who

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also

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remunerated well.

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, you can cherish the moment for sure. Getting

chance

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the

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half of a job done;

therefore

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, we ought to focus on our

study

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although

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I demand a study partner like you, who

had

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contributed a lot

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my past success in Bachelor qualification.

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, my option is limited, but to ask you to do it again.

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study

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, we can go to

cinema

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and I can cook nice food for you, that you prefer most. My fitness routine can

also

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be maintained with your assistance and picking-up girls would be

lot

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easier for me. All the best! Ryan Smith

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coherence cohesion

Organize your ideas in a more structured manner to improve coherence and cohesion.

task response

Ensure that all the points requested in the prompt are adequately addressed to enhance task response.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

174 words

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ecstatic
roommate
accommodation
expenses
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