You and a friend have both been accepted to a study abroad program in Paris, France. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: •Congratulate him/her for also being accepted •Ask him/her if he/she would like to be your roommate •Discuss possible activities that the two of you could do together

Dear Stephen, I am writing to you to celebrate
success
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of our acceptance at the foreign education program in Paris. Here are my purposes for writing you
this
letter. At
first,
I
can't
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be happier for you that you'll be part of my learning journey again. You can really be proud of yourself as
this
university is one of the top institutions of the world, which
produce
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best
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graduates, who
also
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remunerated well.
Therefore
, you can cherish the moment for sure. Getting
chance
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is
the
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half of a job done;
therefore
, we ought to focus on our
study
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,
although
I demand a study partner like you, who
had
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contributed a lot
on
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my past success in Bachelor qualification.
Consequently
, my option is limited, but to ask you to do it again.
Besides
study
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, we can go to
cinema
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the cinema
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and I can cook nice food for you, that you prefer most. My fitness routine can
also
be maintained with your assistance and picking-up girls would be
lot
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easier for me. All the best! Ryan Smith
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  • secondly
  • thirdly
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  • moreover
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  • therefore
  • however
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  • despite

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • congratulations
  • ecstatic
  • roommate
  • accommodation
  • expenses
  • cultural activities
  • museums
  • landmarks
  • French cuisine
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